Today I have some more Volcano slides! We are doing a lot of volcano stuff this term. In these volcano slides I have made a story. I hope you like it! Blog ya later!!!
Mālō e lelei Mikayla, Wow, there was lots of danger and excitement in your story for the reader to get caught up in! I liked the way you built up the danger at the beginning. Your dialogue puts the reader right into the action. Next time you could put each new person speaking on a new line (like they do in books) as this makes it easier for the reader to tell who is speaking. I loved the idea of the fire horse changing into a water horse, it was a great twist in your story. I'm also glad some of your characters survived to tell another tale : ) Megan
Talofa Mikalya, Balqees here from room 23 =] I really like your story about the volcano adventure. Its very funny and exiting! I hope you do more of these stories. Blog you later :D ~Balqees🍄
Mālō e lelei Mikayla, Wow, there was lots of danger and excitement in your story for the reader to get caught up in! I liked the way you built up the danger at the beginning. Your dialogue puts the reader right into the action. Next time you could put each new person speaking on a new line (like they do in books) as this makes it easier for the reader to tell who is speaking. I loved the idea of the fire horse changing into a water horse, it was a great twist in your story. I'm also glad some of your characters survived to tell another tale : ) Megan
ReplyDeleteTalofa Mikalya, Balqees here from room 23 =]
ReplyDeleteI really like your story about the volcano adventure. Its very funny and exiting! I hope you do more of these stories. Blog you later :D
~Balqees🍄