Hiit is Mikayla here and I am making a blog about there is a boy in the girls bath room it is a good book you must know what it is about so any way this is what I am showing you today it is a letter for Carla so if you have been up to the part where Bradley gets a letter from Carla so I made a letter to come back to Carla so that was it I hoped you liked it
BYE
Hi Mikayla, I like the way you have shown how Bradley might change his mind about seeing Carla. He was angry and hurt when she said she would no longer be his counsellor but hopefully he will be able to move on. I think he will really miss her too, as she helped him understand his feelings. He does seem more able to talk with his family and friends now, so I hope he will share more with them.
ReplyDeleteYou also showed how much the gold stars meant to Bradley and I loved how you said they looked like they were from space! I want you to keep remembering to re-read your writing and to check you sentence lengths. Here is a link to the Writing Modelling book on our Class site to help : Using and in your sentences Keep up the good work! bye : )
Hi Miss Judd you are right I might have put to much and in there next time I will try not to do to much okay see ya 😜
DeleteHi Mikayla, I don't think there is too much writing but I do think you could add some full stops so your sentences are easier to follow. If you read your text out loud it will help you hear where the full stops could go. When I read text out loud I try and notice when I need to take a breath and that helps me see where to put a full stop. bye : )
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Deleteso i guess i do not need more writing thank you for telling me
BYE!!!!!!!!!
Hi Mikayla I really love your letter to caral it was amazing an cool I forgot to post mine but its ok it was great and BAiiiii
ReplyDeletethank you i will have a look at you blog
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